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©2007-2009 =SarahxJane
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Please note: The photographs and writing below belong to me. I also own the hands.



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*** moved temporarily for the My Personal Nightmare contest - [link]



VERSION II - [link]





I fumbled blindly through the darkness

the shadows taking over me


my breath coming slower

a slow coldness sweeping over me

I reached out a hand

attempting to grasp anything


anything

to keep me upright


but my fingers met with nothing

an emptiness was at my fingertips



and I fell


I fell to the ground


and closed my eyes


the darkness consuming me entirely





and it was a still night

a silent night outside





the night,


I died.







Photographs and above writing are mine


Critiques


:iconnirelleth:
THis is definitely a very interesting image, unlike what I have seen before. It is really rare to find a concept that hasn't been used a lot already, but I do think you found one here.
It is lovely how you tell a story just with the hands.
I really also like the dark mood in the images, it really adds to it, and gives the viewer a darker feeling. One thing I dislike is the flash on the hand in the first and second image, it is pretty much too harsh, it would look a lot better with a softer light, which doesn't take away all the details.
Also I am not sure about the angle from which the main image was taken, maybe it could have been lowered a bit. Not from the ground like the last image, but more from a middle point probably.
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:iconelleir:
The concept's kind of interesting but in my opinion a little too '';pretictable'' or cliché, may I say... But I really love the technique you used to express what you wanted to show into those four pictures.

I love the composition (and by that I mean the way you put those little picture on the right), but I'm not sure about the quality of the pictures.. The bluriness adds something to it, but there's something awkward that bugs my mind a little.

However, the angle on the last shot with the red tint of the model's hand truly expresses something powerful even though it's the end. Overall, that's a nice piece, but you should work a little more on the concept itself.
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:iconhavens-red-angel:
I like the combonation of the shots, but the first on in the panel on the right could be a bit more dramatic.

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:iconout-zero:
nice shots ..
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:iconlunar-moth:
Excellent integration of the hallway photo with the hands! It illustrates perfectly what you have written. And to be honest it gives me chills. Very effective combination of words and picture.

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:iconxtremee:
this is very nice.. i mean impressive...for real i like it a lot...it gaves me an idea how to make a new scene for my comics lol but great this just great keep it up!!!
:iconphenomteabz:
This is a very intriguing shot, I like the title of it and the poem that goes with it. Must check out the rest of your work.

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"No Day But Today"
:icongenisinewdream:
nice nice, love the words they make the picture complete

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:iconyoureuglykbie:
well done.
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:iconx3akihotarux3:
Amazing!

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